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Hey hey mama, said the way you move[M0n:-6104]
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Post by Hat Salesman on Apr 21, 2008 10:29:09 GMT -5
Prologue: Awakening
Come to me... Come to me, Kras'ng'thuk, to the mortal plane... Kras could hear the song that followed. It lured him to the Forbidden Lands, the lands of humans. He pushed through the winds, carved his way through the sky, and dropped... He went straight through the ground as if it wasn't there... and he landed within a summoning circle. He looked across to his captor. All Kras knew was that his captor wore a red robe and hood. Only part of his face could be seen, but the part Kras saw made him know immediately who had summoned him. Tenseru.
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Post by McJesus on Apr 21, 2008 10:53:46 GMT -5
You're dropping these random names and it's kind of confusing, but hopefully you're going somewhere cause the writing ain't too bad.
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Hat Salesman
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Hey hey mama, said the way you move[M0n:-6104]
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Post by Hat Salesman on Apr 21, 2008 11:27:12 GMT -5
Well, demons sure aren't going to be named in English, are they?
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Post by rabiesisme on Apr 21, 2008 11:34:42 GMT -5
Well, demons sure aren't going to be named in English, are they? No.... He means that you're just mentioning people and locations like we're supposed to know them. Or atleast I think he means that.
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Hat Salesman
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Hey hey mama, said the way you move[M0n:-6104]
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Post by Hat Salesman on Apr 21, 2008 11:49:54 GMT -5
Yeah, a lot of stories are like that. Also, what locations? I just put the lands of humans...
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Post by rabiesisme on Apr 21, 2008 12:16:29 GMT -5
Also, what locations? I just put the lands of humans... Oh, whoops. I read it and saw "Forbidden lands". Musta missed the lands of humans part. Nevermind.
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Post by liteice on Apr 25, 2008 19:59:09 GMT -5
not bad i guess.
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