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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 16, 2008 15:15:59 GMT -5
Well, hey there! Ny first contribution the Fan Fiction section of the site, and I hope it's the first of many. To empty my head of ideas before it explodes (A self-satisfactory prick is me ) The Aftermath Chapter1This is about a story between Balto and Trinidex, two power-hungry maniacs who would stop at nothing to possess the Brawl, they had been at war for many months, after which they resorted to the most drastic measure of all.... Nuclear warfare. Nuke after nuke was launched at the opposite occupants territory. Cities were destroyed, the canyon collapsed into itself and the Fab Zone portal was completely destroyed in the blast. The few who survived the initial blasts have been moving when the wind blows and the radiation level is lower, exposion to the chemical substances will cause 'disruptions' within the body, first causing all immune system functions to shut down, then the host will become lame in the limbs, slowing his movement, then death.... Trinidex was killed by a direct missile hit to his HQ, now all that remains of the once prosperous Brawl was ruins, ashes, and a handful of survivors who must survive from the mutations created within the cesspools of toxic sludge and waste and Balto's 'Cleansing army'.... This Is Legend one shitty day. Diary entry Log 14/9/XX "I've been hiding with a young youth, he called himself 'Swordkill', I think the chemicals in the air have been gettign to his brain though. He is very skilled with a large blade he carries, it has small blades protruding from the side that whirr and spin when he pulls a small wire attached to the handle, kind of like the primitive chainsaws that were manufactured in the earlier years, when the Brawl wasn't ravaged with destruction as it is now... We found a house to hide in, it has 3 floors and enough provisions to last us a few weeks, Balto troops have passed a few times, we were even almost spotted when a sqaud sweeped the house, other than that all that has spotted us is the odd mutant creature which we've quickly disposed off before it could alert any others. Only time will tell if we survive through this nightmare... I can't really take any more of the stress, I already lost a colleague to the infection, he was ravaged, clawed, bitten, kicked and punched until he was a lifeless body, we buried him but he came back to life and continued to attack su before I had to blow his head off... So, the wind's picking up again and we'll be moving out again to search for surviviors and more supplies. I was thinking of making a thread out of this, but it seems a little similar to the 'Zombie Nation' thread. If you think this would still make a good thread, say here, if the majority says yes then I'll post this story in the 'Main Arena' with some pics.
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Post by SwordKill on Feb 16, 2008 15:21:26 GMT -5
Look, everyone! I'm right there! The third person to be mentioned, RIGHT THERE ON THE TENTH LINE ;D
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Post by Grimscott on Feb 16, 2008 15:32:47 GMT -5
I was thinking of making a thread out of this, but it seems a little similar to the 'Zombie Nation' thread. If you think this would still make a good thread, say here, if the majority says yes then I'll post this story in the 'Main Arena' with some pics. It does seem like Zombie Nation, but if this was in the Main Arena, I'd participate. But how does Balto-Boy feel about being a bad guy? Look, everyone! I'm right there! The third person to be mentioned, RIGHT THERE ON THE TENTH LINE ;D Watch the ego, now.
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 16, 2008 15:34:50 GMT -5
I was thinking of making a thread out of this, but it seems a little similar to the 'Zombie Nation' thread. If you think this would still make a good thread, say here, if the majority says yes then I'll post this story in the 'Main Arena' with some pics. It does seem like Zombie Nation, but if this was in the Main Arena, I'd participate. But how does Balto-Boy feel about being a bad guy? He won't have to be, if he chooses to join of the thread's made he can have a change of heart or something and become good.
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Post by Grimscott on Feb 16, 2008 15:49:55 GMT -5
It does seem like Zombie Nation, but if this was in the Main Arena, I'd participate. But how does Balto-Boy feel about being a bad guy? He won't have to be, if he chooses to join of the thread's made he can have a change of heart or something and become good. Good point. He seems to like being an evil dictator in Firemario's candy story as well.
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 16, 2008 15:51:13 GMT -5
He won't have to be, if he chooses to join of the thread's made he can have a change of heart or something and become good. Good point. He seems to like being an evil dictator in Firemario's candy story as well. Oh, well lets see if more people like this idea, and it can be a Main Arena thread! ;D
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 16, 2008 21:59:39 GMT -5
ATTENTION!!!:
Like FM's story, you can request to be in mine too, there is no limit all I ask is you say if you want to be a un-infected survivor or an infected one. If you want to be un-infected but get infected later in the story tell me that too. The first brawler to be added will be Spawner as he said on MSN, PM me to be in it, don't post it here.
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Post by McJesus on Feb 17, 2008 0:10:23 GMT -5
I request that you put Pilot in there. Uninfected.
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 17, 2008 7:21:59 GMT -5
Yay! Next chapter! =D
Chapter 2:We're moving out...
I sat at the door and peeked through the hatch, there was nothing, no sign of movement or life. Perhaps the mutations had moved on? Whatever it is it's an opening for us, the wind is blowing and the radiation meter is down.
I turned to the small youth, he was polishing his sword with a bleak expression on his face "Hey, we have to go now.." The boy stood up and put his backpack on "Ok.." As he always muttered.
I slowly unlocked and opened the front door, perhaps the mutants weren't gone, perhaps they were planning an ambush. That's how they killed my partner, I slowly walked out and crouched down, I scanned the area before telling the boy to come out of the house, "Come on.. Lets go" The boy stuck his head out of the doorway and peered around, I could smell the fear off of him. "It's okay" I assured him "There's no monsters out here"
Swordkill slowly advanced out of his hiding spot, he looked as if he gripped the handle of his sword any tighter it would break, this sword was strange though, it was jet black with silver spikes protruding from it, "What is that made out of?" I asked him. "Os.. Obsidian" He said, "Obsidian? I've never heard of that." "It's a rare metal, it can't bend, and it won't melt if put up to any degree of heat." He replied "Wow... " I stood up and put my hand on his shoulder "I promise I'll get you out of this alive" Suddenly there was a gunshot and a bullet pierced into my shoulder "AGGHH!" I hit the floor, it was a squad from Balto's army! I turned to tell Swordkill to run but he wasn't there... I looked up at the stocky figures wearing a gas mask peering down at me MP5 right in my face, "all survivors found are to be eliminated" I heard a larger one say, probably the leader, the soldier loaded his gun and aimed it at me, already I'd failed Swordkill. I clenched my teeth and prepared for death... Just then I heard a scream as one of the soldiers was sliced right in half, he continued to crawl and choke on his blood as Swordkill continued to kill the other soldiers, he came to the last soldier, the leader... Swordkill swung his sword aiming for his head, the leader was obviously well trained in close quarters combat, as he pulled out a combat knife slashed Swordkill before he could finish his strike. Swordkill hit the floor, clenching his stomach. I watched the captain pull out his pistol and point at Swordkill's head. I saw the expression in his face as if he knew what was coming, I closed my eyes as I heard a gunshot. I slowly opened my eyes expecting too find a dead Swordkill, but... The captain lay sat against the wall with a bullet in his head. "Who?.." I tried to see, then a figure started to walk over, he was blurry at first but then I saw what appeared to be electricity coursing up and down through his arms, "We have to go" He said. "Wait.. Who are you?" He picked up Swordkill and turned to me, "Call me Spawner..."Spawner..."
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 17, 2008 7:48:21 GMT -5
ANOTHER ATTENTION: I've realised that no one wants to be an infected because to be blunt it seems crap, well here's something to spice it up a bit I will make some of the mutants faster and if you don't want to be a mutant forever I'll make a plot twist so that there's a cure... It's just that it's a pain in the arse to get.
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Post by McJesus on Feb 17, 2008 7:53:03 GMT -5
Still want Pilot to be uninfected.
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 17, 2008 7:54:30 GMT -5
Still want Pilot to be uninfected. Ok but you're after Elementell and Grimscott though.
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Post by SwordKill on Feb 17, 2008 8:10:41 GMT -5
Nice work there. A pity I got sliced
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 17, 2008 8:11:53 GMT -5
Nice work there. A pity I got sliced Yes, but you owned the soldiers! ;D
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 18, 2008 15:21:15 GMT -5
Chapter 3:A Flash of Light
As I staggered after Spawner who was still carrying Swordkill, I looked around most of the bodies that strewn the ruins after the explosions were gone, the mutants must have eaten them. Now there were no more bodies left, perhaps they would die out and they could rebuild, although mutants they are they still need food to keep them alive like us, that's probably the only human feature they kept after they turned.
As we walked down the main road I watched two buildings almost looming over us, I thought they'd topple over at any minute. We stopped at a pile of rubble to rest and take some water, walking in the open was harsh and the constant clouds of ash made you thirsty. As we got up to set off again Spawner stopped, "Wait.." He instructed, "What is it?" I asked, "I smell something..." I pulled out my shotgun and quickly loaded it with some shells, I was going to be prepared this time, there was a crash in one of the building ahead and we stopped almost frozen by the sudden sound.
We slowly advanced forward in a defensive stance, watching all sides, although blood-thirsty the mutants hunted almost exactly like the coyote creature, they would circle the prey and rip it apart with their claws.
Suddenly a mutant jumped down in front of Spawner smashing him through a wall, leaving me face-to-face with this creature, I stared at the blood shot eyes I had once stared into before with my partner before I blew his brains out, and I certainly wasn't going to do any different here.
I lunged forward hoping to get the advantage but surprisingly the mutant acted faster and rushed forward smacking me in the stomach, I hit the deck clutching my stomach, the mutant walked closer and I watched it opens its mouth, rows and rows of teeth showed and blood dripped from its lip, it lunged to pull me to my feet, I rolled sideways and shot its leg. The mutant roared and kicked me back winding me again, it rushed over and I manged to get a round off before it struck me again, luckily my shot hit in the chest and it slowed to a halt watching it's own red-green blood drip from its chest, it stared at me with vicious eyes, the rage building up inside it, it showed its claws and charged, I covered my face with my arms, but then A flash of Light shone behind me and it blinded the monster, before I could look behind me five needles were stuck in the mutant's head and a what appeared to be pure light sliced through the monster, killing it.
I turned to my mystery saviour, before I could ask him what his name was he said "My name is Hikari and your friend are in danger." Suddenly I snapped back to attention and ran towards the building as I got closer I heard a roar from the building....
This chapter's a little short, sorry.
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Post by SwordKill on Feb 18, 2008 15:38:54 GMT -5
This chapter's a little short, sorry. Is still good. What was that mysterious roar?
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 18, 2008 15:40:34 GMT -5
This chapter's a little short, sorry. Is still good. What was that mysterious roar? You shall see, you shall see... The only thing I can say is three characters will be introduced next chapter.
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Post by rabiesisme on Feb 18, 2008 16:18:32 GMT -5
Nice, I like it.
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 20, 2008 14:29:26 GMT -5
Chapter 4:Shit goes down
As I charged at the door to the building Hikari jumped through the first floor window ahead. I bashed down the door with truncheon, the door shattered quite easily, probably due to the radiation slowly rotting it away. I ran into what was a lobby and charged for the stairs, I pulled in the handle. Shit, it was locked, I jumped behind the reception desk looking for the key, I manged to wrench it from a mutated security guard after I smashed in his skull with my truncheon. I returned to the door and quickly unlocked it, this time I heard another roar followed by a blood-curdling scream pierced the still air, I opened the door and ran up the stairs, I got to the first floor and seen Hikari with a hole in his side, and Grimscott nursing his wound.
Grimscott noticed me and stood up, "Brawl! You have to help Sheep! Rabies has him trapped in the next room!" "What, Sheep!?" I charged into the next room withought hearing anymore, Sheep and him had always been best friends, he wasn't going to let him die. I stopped as he saw Rabies lift Sheep with one of his symboties into the air "Sheep!!" I shouted, Rabies turned round and smacked me with his other symboite into another wall. I coughed and stood back up, I was about to charge at Rabies when three mutants jumped down from the ceiling and cornered me into the wall, as I tried to load my shotgun, they all leaped at me holding me down trying to snap at my face with their teeth, "Dammit Sheep!! Hold on! I'm coming!" I called out as I wrestled with my aggressive attackers. I managed to snap the neck of the last one when I heard a scream, it was Sheep, one of Rabies Symboite had a grip on Sheep's stomach with his teeth, the symboite began to tear and shred his skin with its teeth, until it managed to rip his entire stomach out, gallons of blood and the contents of Sheep's guts fell out and landed with a sickening splat on the floor, it was at that point I decided to give up I sat there as Rabies advanced symboites raised, blood still dripping from their carnivorous teeth, I shut my eyes and prepared fro death, it was then I heard Grimscott charge scythe in hand trough the door. The sudden commotion caught Rabies my surprise and Grimscott swung her scythe cutting off one of Rabies arms, surprised and wounded Rabies fled, I got up and ran over to sheep, I noticed his skin was starting to turn a pale greenish colour and his eyes started to turn red, I was about to close his eyes when he took a snap at my hand. I fell back and Sheep lunged at me, luckily Grimscott caught him with her scythe and shoved him back into a wall. Sheep stood back up and charged, as he was about to take a bite at Grim the floor board underneath him weakened and eh fell to the ground floor. I sat back at a wall and rested my head against it, "So is Hikari alright?" I asked Grim "Yes, he'll be ok, his wound was caused by a pipe sticking out of the wa.." grim was cut off by another roar coming from outside, we both rushed to the window, there was an army of mutants standing outside, Rabies standing on top of some debris with his arm still missing, he pointed with his other arm to the window we were standing at, he muttered some garbled from of english to the mutants and they started to swarm in the entrance. "Grab Hikari! We need to get to the roof!" "What about Spawner and Swordkill? I saw them but they fled to the other side of the building." "We'll just have to hope we meet up with them... Now go!!"
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Post by SwordKill on Feb 20, 2008 14:40:39 GMT -5
Nice, but you seriously messed up. Your best mate was torn apart and eaten alive by some bastard zombie. You gonna take that? You just keep so cool. I would go fucking insane if my best mate was gruesomely slaughtered. You need to describe what the character FEELS as oppose to what he DOES.
Seriously, consider these things.
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Post by rabiesisme on Feb 20, 2008 14:48:36 GMT -5
Hellz yeah, I'm awesome. :D
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Feb 20, 2008 17:01:13 GMT -5
Oh, wait. Did you say Rabies and I are best friends? 'cause we really are secret agents, he's working for the soviets, so we can't be friends...
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Post by bulet on Feb 20, 2008 17:16:43 GMT -5
Oh, wait. Did you say Rabies and I are best friends? 'cause we really are secret agents, he's working for the soviets, so we can't be friends... i bite off my best friends arms too.
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Post by Grimscott on Feb 20, 2008 17:30:39 GMT -5
Nice, but you seriously messed up. Your best mate was torn apart and eaten alive by some bastard zombie. You gonna take that? You just keep so cool. I would go fucking insane if my best mate was gruesomely slaughtered. You need to describe what the character FEELS as oppose to what he DOES. Seriously, consider these things. Yeah. It would also help if you made more paragraphs. It's kind of hard to read a big wall of text. It also makes the story look longer, at least in my opinion. Hellz yeah, I'm awesome. I cut your symbiote, foo!
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Post by bulet on Feb 20, 2008 17:46:35 GMT -5
Nice, but you seriously messed up. Your best mate was torn apart and eaten alive by some bastard zombie. You gonna take that? You just keep so cool. I would go fucking insane if my best mate was gruesomely slaughtered. You need to describe what the character FEELS as oppose to what he DOES. Seriously, consider these things. Yeah. It would also help if you made more paragraphs. It's kind of hard to read a big wall of text. It also makes the story look longer, at least in my opinion. Hellz yeah, I'm awesome. I cut your symbiote, foo! no, you cut his arm.
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Post by McJesus on Feb 21, 2008 8:25:15 GMT -5
"Brawl! You have to help Sheep!"
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Post by spawner on Feb 21, 2008 10:54:32 GMT -5
I noticed alot of typo's in there, also, i ran away D:
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Post by SwordKill on Feb 21, 2008 11:33:58 GMT -5
"Brawl! You have to help Sheep!" heh heh
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Feb 21, 2008 16:37:44 GMT -5
"Brawl! You have to help Sheep!" I just know I'n missing a joke there... "Brawl! You have to help Sheep!" heh heh Ok, I'm missing something...
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Post by spawner on Feb 21, 2008 17:04:38 GMT -5
Im missing the joke too...
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