Post by Kromax on Nov 5, 2010 23:48:31 GMT -5
I'm trying out this new story me and Shackles have been brainstorming, please give me some feedback.
Click click click, the keys dented with each tap on the computer's text, conversations and complaints filled the lobby of the bank, men, women and children lined informally, awaiting their turn at the teller. The citizens falling into different nationalities and regions, the pitches of different accents lining the chatter, the tellers especially angry having to work on a highly respected holiday in memorial the birthday of the city's founder.
Three men walked casually into the room, all dressed in very exotic outfits, one of them, a average sized man, wore a dark trench coat, goggles around his neck, and an odd, cylinder shaped backpack, his white hair reflecting the dull sunbeams of the outside. He glanced to the man to his right, a somewhat tall, trim man, sporting a large Afro black and a goatee, he shrugged comfortably in his blue jeans and red tank-top, he also sported a backpack, with this one resembling a more formal shape. The final man needed no introduction, due to his average attire, short brown hair, and blue jeans, his entire persona wrecked of normal. the only note-worthy feature was his odd amount of sweat beading down his body. His face reached an odd hue of red, he didn't even look up to his two accomplices.
The average man nervously walked towards the front of the line, trembling while gripping the gun strapped to his back, the woman and child waiting, now cut off by the man, were a bit distracted with each other, allowing him to sneak ahead with no effort.
"May I help you?" the bank teller asked, not once looking away from her computer screen (She was very determined to win a game of Minesweeper.) Without a word, the man removed the gun from his back and shot the teller between the eyes, in one fluid motion, he threw the gun into the head of the woman behind him, and ducked down. The gunshot distilled the room, all of them staring at the man crouching in fear, though, with the exception of the afro'ed man, the remaining spectators would soon lose sight all together. The coated man shot his arms forward, and clenched his fists, from his wrists, an sickly red ooze shot out, smearing on people and walls, the flesh of men and women alike sizzled and deteriorated into the air, the walls seemed to melt like ice, but with no water displaced on the floor. The crimson goo destroyed and faded almost instantly, killing nearly everyone in the lobby, melting walls, and then leaving no traces of it's existences. The nervous man now was in-cased in trauma, with the two other surviving men shrugging it off and heading towards the backroom, the afro'ed man stepped over mutilated bodies and grabbed the other by the arm, while the goggled man heading back.
"Umm.. w-why do you guys need me?" the man finally stated,
"Hmm, good question," The goggled man said, "Will, why do we need him?"
Will smirked, "A scapegoat, Shackles, we'll give him a tank of 'red', blind him, mute him, make him deaf, and make it so if he moves, the canister explodes, killin' witnesses."
"I..I didn't think you'd tell me." The man quickly realized that warning to his death was no better than the dying itself, he was quickly met with knives in his eyes. He tried to scream in pain, but the shock, and his tongue being melted off by Shackles, stopped his pleas. His ears were amputated next, and he was gagged and bound to the chemical canister, full of the red ooze that quickly knocked down a large crowd in moments. The hallway was set perfectly for the crime, the room he sat in had one entrance, which was blocked by himself, even a trying to move him out of the way could trigger this trap once activated, luckily the duo would be far gone by then, Shackles even wanted to remotely activated. They planted small explosive devices which Will had loaded up around the structure, making sure the areas only skimmed by the chemical blast would still be injured. They ran into one problem, although they expected the entire main staff to be out on the lobby, one worker was in the back room fixing some server issues, not a problem, however, Will quickly moved in for a neck-snap, due to low upper body strength however, this ended with a struggle and the workers head against the wall. A quick walk into the back room, and the two were staring down a large bank vault, on an average vault this would mean the end of their trek, but unfortunately, this one was made to hold armed guards to stop further advancement to the cash.
Will casually tossed a small hand-held explosive in his hand, and grabbed another from his backpack with his other, he started mounting each on the great vault door, Shackles, on the other hand, started sticking small pellets of the corrosive chemical around the vault, after taking a few steps back, the two took out a small controller in unison, Shackles clicked the button first, melting the door frame, and allowing the metal circle to sit in place. Pistol rounds whipped through the ringed hole. After taking some cover, Will activated his own special effect, the metal door flew back from the blast, the weight of the gate redacted much of a jump, but it did casually flattened two terrified guards.
Shackles dash from cover, tightening the valve on his forearm, he ran into the room, took aim, and killed 3 guards with an equal amount of shots. Making sure not to his any of the structural pillars lining the main pathway of the room. Will followed in, pistol drawn, and shot down the remaining guards. The rest of the operation was child's play, Shackles sprayed the last vault door with a very uncontrolled spurt, only damaging tiny bits of money.
The endgame sight was glorious, assorted bills, gems, and minerals, all lined perfectly, with walls of safe deposit boxes lining the scene. Shackles emptied his backpack, and started loaded it with the spoils of victory, "Man, this was worth the payout on the explosives." Shackles spilled out as his eyes glinted with greed, but Will had his mind off in the walls, more precisely, BOX # 325, He took a almost microscopic explosive, one of his own special design, and placed it on the lock, he detonated it with ease, Shackles was not even alerted by the blast, too fixated on how much of the acid he could for mate with the cash he makes. Will recovered a very average looking folder from the newly opened box, and slid it casually into his backpack, then went on to Shackles and his looting.
The two finished the plunder, and started to make for their escape, they were certain the authorities would be waiting, so some demolition work, Will readied some explosives, and planted them onto a small patch of wall not dominated by lock boxes, they knew it led into a small clothing shop closed for the holiday, a perfect get away for if they could do it quietly. Will did something that at this point was so worn that he grew bored. They slipped through the new hole in the wall, Shackles grabbed a new trench-coat, and they waltzed out of the structure. Shackles pulled out a remote, wired to a trap yet not readied, instead of waiting for the mouse to fall into the trap, he decided he would make the trap explode. Click click click, the two looked down, and the bank collapsed.
The word as you know is gone, shot in the head and left in a shallow grave, in it's place, is this. Located in a shady land resembling your own, sits a large island on the world's crown, surrounded by the vast, unending ocean, while half of this isolated world lives in wealth, the other half has fallen to the state where murder is fine as long as you do it creatively, children on one side of the town are gifted with wealth to buy a small home. The others have to go on a thieving spree daily for food.
There are no powers, but that doesn't push these psychopaths back, they adapt to normality, and make it surreal, they turn a normal society where they would fail, and take it over. Creating their own powers, whether it be mental supremacy, or a mastery over fire.
The city breaks into four major regions, Rich, Banking, Industrial, and the Slums, the former are the darkened ideals of wealth, with the greatest business man at least having 20 on his kill-count. The latter control their own world, with petty gangs fighting for victory over each other, and the larger fighting for control of the districts. The battles are in a state of slowing, until now.
Chapter 1
Withdrawal
Withdrawal
Click click click, the keys dented with each tap on the computer's text, conversations and complaints filled the lobby of the bank, men, women and children lined informally, awaiting their turn at the teller. The citizens falling into different nationalities and regions, the pitches of different accents lining the chatter, the tellers especially angry having to work on a highly respected holiday in memorial the birthday of the city's founder.
Three men walked casually into the room, all dressed in very exotic outfits, one of them, a average sized man, wore a dark trench coat, goggles around his neck, and an odd, cylinder shaped backpack, his white hair reflecting the dull sunbeams of the outside. He glanced to the man to his right, a somewhat tall, trim man, sporting a large Afro black and a goatee, he shrugged comfortably in his blue jeans and red tank-top, he also sported a backpack, with this one resembling a more formal shape. The final man needed no introduction, due to his average attire, short brown hair, and blue jeans, his entire persona wrecked of normal. the only note-worthy feature was his odd amount of sweat beading down his body. His face reached an odd hue of red, he didn't even look up to his two accomplices.
The average man nervously walked towards the front of the line, trembling while gripping the gun strapped to his back, the woman and child waiting, now cut off by the man, were a bit distracted with each other, allowing him to sneak ahead with no effort.
"May I help you?" the bank teller asked, not once looking away from her computer screen (She was very determined to win a game of Minesweeper.) Without a word, the man removed the gun from his back and shot the teller between the eyes, in one fluid motion, he threw the gun into the head of the woman behind him, and ducked down. The gunshot distilled the room, all of them staring at the man crouching in fear, though, with the exception of the afro'ed man, the remaining spectators would soon lose sight all together. The coated man shot his arms forward, and clenched his fists, from his wrists, an sickly red ooze shot out, smearing on people and walls, the flesh of men and women alike sizzled and deteriorated into the air, the walls seemed to melt like ice, but with no water displaced on the floor. The crimson goo destroyed and faded almost instantly, killing nearly everyone in the lobby, melting walls, and then leaving no traces of it's existences. The nervous man now was in-cased in trauma, with the two other surviving men shrugging it off and heading towards the backroom, the afro'ed man stepped over mutilated bodies and grabbed the other by the arm, while the goggled man heading back.
"Umm.. w-why do you guys need me?" the man finally stated,
"Hmm, good question," The goggled man said, "Will, why do we need him?"
Will smirked, "A scapegoat, Shackles, we'll give him a tank of 'red', blind him, mute him, make him deaf, and make it so if he moves, the canister explodes, killin' witnesses."
"I..I didn't think you'd tell me." The man quickly realized that warning to his death was no better than the dying itself, he was quickly met with knives in his eyes. He tried to scream in pain, but the shock, and his tongue being melted off by Shackles, stopped his pleas. His ears were amputated next, and he was gagged and bound to the chemical canister, full of the red ooze that quickly knocked down a large crowd in moments. The hallway was set perfectly for the crime, the room he sat in had one entrance, which was blocked by himself, even a trying to move him out of the way could trigger this trap once activated, luckily the duo would be far gone by then, Shackles even wanted to remotely activated. They planted small explosive devices which Will had loaded up around the structure, making sure the areas only skimmed by the chemical blast would still be injured. They ran into one problem, although they expected the entire main staff to be out on the lobby, one worker was in the back room fixing some server issues, not a problem, however, Will quickly moved in for a neck-snap, due to low upper body strength however, this ended with a struggle and the workers head against the wall. A quick walk into the back room, and the two were staring down a large bank vault, on an average vault this would mean the end of their trek, but unfortunately, this one was made to hold armed guards to stop further advancement to the cash.
Will casually tossed a small hand-held explosive in his hand, and grabbed another from his backpack with his other, he started mounting each on the great vault door, Shackles, on the other hand, started sticking small pellets of the corrosive chemical around the vault, after taking a few steps back, the two took out a small controller in unison, Shackles clicked the button first, melting the door frame, and allowing the metal circle to sit in place. Pistol rounds whipped through the ringed hole. After taking some cover, Will activated his own special effect, the metal door flew back from the blast, the weight of the gate redacted much of a jump, but it did casually flattened two terrified guards.
Shackles dash from cover, tightening the valve on his forearm, he ran into the room, took aim, and killed 3 guards with an equal amount of shots. Making sure not to his any of the structural pillars lining the main pathway of the room. Will followed in, pistol drawn, and shot down the remaining guards. The rest of the operation was child's play, Shackles sprayed the last vault door with a very uncontrolled spurt, only damaging tiny bits of money.
The endgame sight was glorious, assorted bills, gems, and minerals, all lined perfectly, with walls of safe deposit boxes lining the scene. Shackles emptied his backpack, and started loaded it with the spoils of victory, "Man, this was worth the payout on the explosives." Shackles spilled out as his eyes glinted with greed, but Will had his mind off in the walls, more precisely, BOX # 325, He took a almost microscopic explosive, one of his own special design, and placed it on the lock, he detonated it with ease, Shackles was not even alerted by the blast, too fixated on how much of the acid he could for mate with the cash he makes. Will recovered a very average looking folder from the newly opened box, and slid it casually into his backpack, then went on to Shackles and his looting.
The two finished the plunder, and started to make for their escape, they were certain the authorities would be waiting, so some demolition work, Will readied some explosives, and planted them onto a small patch of wall not dominated by lock boxes, they knew it led into a small clothing shop closed for the holiday, a perfect get away for if they could do it quietly. Will did something that at this point was so worn that he grew bored. They slipped through the new hole in the wall, Shackles grabbed a new trench-coat, and they waltzed out of the structure. Shackles pulled out a remote, wired to a trap yet not readied, instead of waiting for the mouse to fall into the trap, he decided he would make the trap explode. Click click click, the two looked down, and the bank collapsed.
The word as you know is gone, shot in the head and left in a shallow grave, in it's place, is this. Located in a shady land resembling your own, sits a large island on the world's crown, surrounded by the vast, unending ocean, while half of this isolated world lives in wealth, the other half has fallen to the state where murder is fine as long as you do it creatively, children on one side of the town are gifted with wealth to buy a small home. The others have to go on a thieving spree daily for food.
There are no powers, but that doesn't push these psychopaths back, they adapt to normality, and make it surreal, they turn a normal society where they would fail, and take it over. Creating their own powers, whether it be mental supremacy, or a mastery over fire.
The city breaks into four major regions, Rich, Banking, Industrial, and the Slums, the former are the darkened ideals of wealth, with the greatest business man at least having 20 on his kill-count. The latter control their own world, with petty gangs fighting for victory over each other, and the larger fighting for control of the districts. The battles are in a state of slowing, until now.