Trevanion
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Post by Trevanion on Mar 28, 2012 19:53:00 GMT -5
What This Basicly is is a backstory for my Character Trevanion and what happened to him back in the days before now.  |
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Post by The Omnipresence on Mar 28, 2012 21:37:39 GMT -5
Watch out for dem darkies, they are prone to levitating people and shooting them in the face with lasers!
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Post by llllllllllll on Mar 28, 2012 22:17:59 GMT -5
Can't wait for the next part.
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Post by Gront on Mar 28, 2012 23:54:25 GMT -5
It was short, the narrative felt a little rushed, and quite frankly it was bland. The first part is forgivable; everyone's first chapter is too short. Work on your story pacing and I think this will become much better. |
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Post by Spawner on Mar 29, 2012 7:30:53 GMT -5
He was just getting some practice to be an ophthalmologist.
Feedback:
Try drawing mouths rather than using a box tool, it doesn't look very good, use the curve tool to draw em and look at everyone else's mouths to see how they do it, ain't no inspiration like everyone elses art.
Once mastered, the curve tool can be your best friend.
The eyes are nice.
The spray can tool is pretty terrible since it's hard to make anything look good when it's used. It's not impossible to use well, but hard.
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Post by Bulet on Mar 29, 2012 8:49:51 GMT -5
Hold shift while making heads
Don't use line tool, use curve
Try to use brush, not shapes for mouths
I think you're already on the right track but I'd like to emphasise: Legs>Arms>Torso
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Post by Trevanion on Mar 29, 2012 14:12:05 GMT -5
Thanks For the tips Guys. Love ya all.
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Post by Trevanion on Mar 29, 2012 14:43:19 GMT -5
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Post by Bulet on Mar 29, 2012 15:03:52 GMT -5
Better.
What's he jumping off, a balcony fence?
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Post by Trevanion on Mar 29, 2012 15:12:19 GMT -5
Yeah. I Should of made that more clear.
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Post by Trevanion on Jun 16, 2012 19:15:05 GMT -5
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Post by The Omnipresence on Jun 16, 2012 19:20:04 GMT -5
That palm tree, it was in part 2 as well! WHAT DOES IT MEAN!?!?
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Post by Trevanion on Jun 16, 2012 19:25:48 GMT -5
I like Palm Trees, Its A little secret of mine.  Also: It has a deep and emotional storyline. Reason for Editing: To Add "Also:" |
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Post by Trevanion on Jun 22, 2012 18:44:49 GMT -5
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Post by Trevanion on Jul 3, 2012 14:57:23 GMT -5
 Hope you liked thisone folks  |
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Post by Graysonn on Jul 5, 2012 9:39:35 GMT -5
There's two part three's, other than that, pretty good.
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Post by Trevanion on Jul 5, 2012 10:42:57 GMT -5
Yeah the first part 3 was just a short story basicly.
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Post by Trevanion on Aug 21, 2012 17:00:26 GMT -5
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