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Post by Ele Mantel on Jan 12, 2008 13:16:02 GMT -5
DON'T DO IT! YOU'RE IN THE NEXT CHAPTER! Kay. I will hold off my suisiding.
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Jallo But I Forgot My Password
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Post by Jallo But I Forgot My Password on Jan 12, 2008 20:52:38 GMT -5
Does I comes in and own da nubs?
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Post by SwordKill on Jan 13, 2008 5:58:27 GMT -5
Yes. Why did I get those guys as partners?
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Post by kevmcg1 on Jan 13, 2008 6:39:52 GMT -5
Yes. Why did I get those guys as partners? It's like that episode from South Park when they send those serial killers up to earth to get a Ferrari cake.
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Jan 13, 2008 10:18:40 GMT -5
Yes. Why did I get those guys as partners? So you can get pwnt by the good guys
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Post by Ele Mantel on Jan 13, 2008 11:49:41 GMT -5
Yes. Why did I get those guys as partners? So you can get pwnt by the good guys Lul. Anyways, post the third chapter!
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Jan 18, 2008 17:35:48 GMT -5
Third Chapter up. ;D
I told Elementel he'd be in this one, but i have to go out soon, so the chapter was ended. Sry, Elementel. But you'll be in the next one.
The next part won't really be another chapter, but rather a continuation of this one. Chapter 3: You were all expecting it.
“You… Bastard…” Rabies moaned, “Bulet you bastard, you fucking shot him! Now we have to get the script FAST and get the fuck out of here before anyone shows up!” Sticky yelled .“IT’S NOT MAH FAULT!” Bulet whined, “MAH GUN DID IT BY ITSELF!” Railto happened to look over at Rabies’ and gave a start. “Guys? Guys? You REALLY should stop arguing and take a look…” Spawner and Blue stared in complete shock, Bulet and Sticky noticed, and ceased their argument. Everyone stared at Rabies, or, at the wound on his arm, or the lack of such.
Everyone stared at Jack “Rabies” Izmee’s metal arm.
“You Bastard,” Rabies said, “Now I have to get this thing repaired, do you know how much money it costs?” Bulet pondered for a few seconds. “Um… Twenty dollars?” “No.” Rabies said, walking right up to Bulet. He leaned right into his face. The punched him, yelling. “IT COSTS OVER $9000!!!!!!” Shocked by the sudden defeat of Bulet, Sticky and Railto were stunned for a moment, giving Spawner the chance he needed. “BLUE! CATCH!” He yelled, throwing Blue a wrench from his toolkit. Then, he smashed a similar wrench into the side of Rialto’s head. Wielding his wrench like a sword, Blue went after Sticky. Sticky attempted to take out his gun, but Blue knocked him to the ground. “Just give us the script, and no one will get hurt!” Sticky yelled. Blue raised the wrench, and said something he felt most appropriate form of banter he had. “I’m reading it, wait your turn.” Blue said, and brought the wrench down.
Jay heard the shot from the stairs, and started jumping, 3 stairs at a time, taking out a gun from his pocket, he reached to 6th floor, found the Rec room, and took cover behind the door, then he kicked it in, and yelled, “Alright Sticky, I’m giving you to the count of five to get your hands off them, or I’m gonna shoot your…”
He then noticed how the room was devoid of anyone, except the unconscious bodies of Sticky, Railto, and Bulet. He turned to leave, and bumped into Blue, who was walking through the door. “Rabies! Spawner! There’s another one!” Jallo jumped back, Blue raised his wrench, and Spawner and Rabies rounded the corner. It seemed they were about to fight, then Rabies said “I know you, you’re Jallo, that guy who runs the detective agency around the block, what are you doing here?” Jallo was relieved, and wiped some sweat from his brow. “I’ve been sent here to find you guys.” He said, then toke out a cell phone, and dialed a number. “Elementel? Yeah, it’s Jallo. They’re safe, bring the car around the front and we’ll go from there.” He closed the phone and turned the Blue and friends. “Come with me.” He commanded, motioning towards the elevator. Rabies stepped towards him. “We’ve just been held hostage by some damn thugs, who wanted a STORY that Blue has, we beat the crap outta them, so why should we follow you?” Jallo sighed, and took out his wallet. He flipped it open, revealing the contents. There was a credit card, detective license, and something else. A gold badge, with the engraving of an Eagle, perched on the American Flag. And underneath, writing, “Lieutenant Jallo, officer of the department of national security.”
“Follow me.” He said.
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Post by Jallo on Jan 18, 2008 17:42:28 GMT -5
God fucking bless you sir.
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Post by spawner on Jan 18, 2008 17:42:31 GMT -5
I cant wait for chapter for ! KARMA UP !
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Post by McJesus on Jan 19, 2008 1:31:52 GMT -5
God fucking bless you sir. I take offense to that. >:[
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Post by bulet on Jan 19, 2008 5:07:36 GMT -5
SHEEP!!!i dont wanna be the bad guy.i wanna be the good guy.plz in later storys include me as a good guy.plz
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Post by SwordKill on Jan 19, 2008 5:35:23 GMT -5
SHEEP!!!i dont wanna be the bad guy.i wanna be the good guy.plz in later storys include me as a good guy.plz You act like a real Dumbass noob in the story! Not saying you are, though.
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Post by bulet on Jan 19, 2008 6:51:59 GMT -5
in the story.not for real.
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Post by coughy on Jan 19, 2008 8:09:55 GMT -5
in the story.not for real. *cough*
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Post by bulet on Jan 19, 2008 9:14:26 GMT -5
security!remove this man!
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Post by SwordKill on Jan 19, 2008 9:58:36 GMT -5
security!remove this man! Sounds awesome. Where can I get my own private security?
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Post by bulet on Jan 19, 2008 10:01:18 GMT -5
over yonder down there.*points in a store* ;D lol im kiding.when i said security i meant mods.(ahem john)
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Post by The Omnipresence on Feb 1, 2008 16:31:48 GMT -5
Whens the next chapter dammit!
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Feb 1, 2008 16:39:42 GMT -5
Whens the next chapter dammit! Sure, it's coming.
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 1, 2008 16:40:38 GMT -5
Whens the next chapter dammit! Sure, it's coming. Am I in this one?
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Feb 1, 2008 16:42:42 GMT -5
Not yet, in the one after this.
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 1, 2008 16:47:27 GMT -5
Not yet, in the one after this. Ok, good or bad guy?
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Feb 1, 2008 16:58:54 GMT -5
Well originally you were good, but now that you have LT. Brawl, you can be evil, and Brawl will be good.
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Post by kevmcg1 on Feb 1, 2008 16:59:50 GMT -5
Well originally you were good, but now that you have LT. Brawl, you can be evil, and Brawl will be good. Sounds good to me.
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Post by Xinxinix on Feb 1, 2008 17:02:59 GMT -5
Sweet! Can't wait till the next chapter. Can I be in one?
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Feb 1, 2008 17:14:50 GMT -5
Chapter 3, part two:
In the elevator, no one could stop staring at Jallo. He’d always been kind of quiet, showing up at local parties, but never talking to anyone. No one would have ever guessed that he was working for the government. When they arrived at the lobby, there was a limo parked in the driveway. A man in a suit was holding the passenger door open for them. “I’m Elementel.” The man told them. “Jallo’s chief of luxury transportation.” Blue and Spawner looked at each other, than back at Elementel. “So, in English, his driver,” Blue said. “Chief of Luxury Transportation.” Elementel insisted, his voice straining. “Driver.” “Chief of Luxury Transportation.” “Driver.” “Chief of Luxury Transportation!” Spawner blocked the side of his mouth his hand as he whispered to Rabies, “Driver.”
“You shouldn’t tease Elementel.” Jallo told them in a scolding tone as they got in the Limo. “This is dangerous work we’re doing, as you’ve seen, people are out to get us, and Elementel is the person in charge of keeping us safe. Our lives are in his hands.”
“Let me out.” Rabies said.
They were being watched again. This time by McJesus, McJesus observed them exit the building, he observed them get into the limo, and he observed the limo drive away.
He also observed the clock on the counter, which told him his shift was over. McJesus retrived his coat from the employee lounge, and left the restaurant.
And so began the ritual. That hated ritual. It happened everyday. He would feel in his right pocket, and find one of his most treasured possessions. A necklace with a halo on the end, He smiled as he remembered the girl who had given it to him. He rembered how she had laughed when she slipped it over his head, exclaiming, “Now you really ARE Jesus!” He didn’t know where she had gotten it, but she had probably gotten it made by her parents. They were jewlers, maybe that’s why they named their daughter Ruby. He smiled again, remembering all the times they had had together.
But then he remembered something else. The mission, the shot, the funeral…
Then he would reach into his left pocket, and close his hand around his other treasured possession…
McJesus’ hand closed around the smooth handle of his gun, and he repeated his oath.
“Captain Chip will pay for killing Ruby. I swear it.”
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Post by Grimscott on Feb 2, 2008 1:37:41 GMT -5
“Captain Chip will pay for killing Ruby. I swear it.” This is getting interesting.
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Post by McJesus on Feb 2, 2008 5:11:56 GMT -5
Oh snap!
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Post by bulet on Feb 2, 2008 5:18:28 GMT -5
yes perfect exept that i dont wanna die. can you make me a cool comeback where ijoin the good guys?
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Post by Maybe Might Not Be Moneybags on Feb 2, 2008 9:04:37 GMT -5
yes perfect exept that i dont wanna die. can you make me a cool comeback where ijoin the good guys? Well, you're not going good, but at least you don't get- Whoops! Spoiler!
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