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Post by Deadly Virus on Jun 1, 2008 8:52:41 GMT -5
Woah, awesome story Rabies. Also, yay, I'm finally in a fanfic. :3
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Post by ProDuce on Jun 1, 2008 9:00:00 GMT -5
Woah, awesome story Rabies. Also, yay, I'm finally in a fanfic. :3 lol, i bet your happy? any way brill story wanting to see more
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Post by Hat Salesman on Jun 1, 2008 9:05:37 GMT -5
Rabies is cooler than McJesus.
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Post by rabiesisme on Jun 1, 2008 9:38:03 GMT -5
Rabies is cooler than McJesus. Quoted, so that it never goes away.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 1, 2008 9:41:04 GMT -5
Wow, your latest chapter was really interesting, can't wait to see what happens next!
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ProDuce
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Post by ProDuce on Jun 1, 2008 9:41:36 GMT -5
Rabies is cooler than McJesus. What Would You Like On ya Tomb Stone?
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Post by Balto-Boy on Jun 1, 2008 9:44:02 GMT -5
I still think we's all gonna die.
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Post by The Omnipresence on Jun 1, 2008 15:07:47 GMT -5
I still think we's all gonna die. Bleh not I, I will just fly away to my castle in the mountains.
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Post by bulet on Jun 2, 2008 10:32:56 GMT -5
WOO-HOO! Awesome pic of me in full-body too! It's EXATCLY how I imagined Bulet as full-body! McJesus, I think I love you now! And Rabies, INCREDIBLE story, you may be even more awesome than McJesus! Thumbs up, can't wait for the next awesome chapter. ;D
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Post by Zarth on Jun 2, 2008 12:55:27 GMT -5
WOO-HOO! Awesome pic of me in full-body too! It's EXATCLY how I imagined Bulet as full-body! McJesus, I think I love you now! And Rabies, INCREDIBLE story, you may be even more awesome than McJesus! Thumbs up, can't wait for the next awesome chapter. ;D soo uhh, where am i in the story? if you need help drawing zarth you can pm me, and send me a picture and tell me where to draw zarth in the pic.
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Post by bulet on Jun 2, 2008 13:02:41 GMT -5
WOO-HOO! Awesome pic of me in full-body too! It's EXATCLY how I imagined Bulet as full-body! McJesus, I think I love you now! And Rabies, INCREDIBLE story, you may be even more awesome than McJesus! Thumbs up, can't wait for the next awesome chapter. ;D soo uhh, where am i in the story? if you need help drawing zarth you can pm me, and send me a picture and tell me where to draw zarth in the pic. Oh I don't know, MAYBE YOU ARE NOT IN! So now you are some kind of celebrity that NEEDS to be in the story? You sir, are an atention whore.
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Post by Zarth on Jun 2, 2008 13:16:19 GMT -5
soo uhh, where am i in the story? if you need help drawing zarth you can pm me, and send me a picture and tell me where to draw zarth in the pic. Oh I don't know, MAYBE YOU ARE NOT IN! So now you are some kind of celebrity that NEEDS to be in the story? You sir, are an atention whore. wtf is your problem, i looked at viruses and his is the same thig as RabiesIsMe but RabiesIsMe is longer, i just thought i would be in it. you dont have to start swaring at me you ass hole
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Post by bulet on Jun 2, 2008 13:32:16 GMT -5
Oh I don't know, MAYBE YOU ARE NOT IN! So now you are some kind of celebrity that NEEDS to be in the story? You sir, are an atention whore. wtf is your problem, i looked at viruses and his is the same thig as RabiesIsMe but RabiesIsMe is longer, i just thought i would be in it. you dont have to start swaring at me you ass hole Well you didn't have to say: ''So uhh... where am I in this story?'' You could have said somehting like: ''Maybe planing on putting me in the story somehow? I would apriciate it very much.'' That sounded very selfish, and I HATE selfish people. And who's swearin' at who now?
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Post by rabiesisme on Jun 2, 2008 13:39:03 GMT -5
How's about you both shut up? >:C
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Post by bulet on Jun 2, 2008 13:45:24 GMT -5
How's about you both shut up? >:C Yes mastuh Rabies, I am at your service! *Shuts up* :3
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Post by SwordKill on Jun 4, 2008 1:53:29 GMT -5
Real, real great story. Amazing, even. Looking forward to more.
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Post by jallo on Jun 8, 2008 15:53:19 GMT -5
Rabies, beautiful. My heart was racing as I read through that. I could see, hear, and feel the enviorment around me. You are an amazing writer, Rabies.
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Post by McJesus on Jun 8, 2008 17:41:41 GMT -5
Oh, and if you want anybody to blame for no new chapters, blame me. Rabies won't post chapters until I've made a picture for them.
Rabies, might I suggest you just post the chapters, and I'll edit pictures ito them?
speaking of which, where the hell is he?
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Post by Grimscott on Jun 21, 2008 19:26:12 GMT -5
I demand that this story receive an update!
Please? :'(
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Post by rabiesisme on Jun 21, 2008 19:31:52 GMT -5
I demand that this story receive an update! Please? :'(Oh, and if you want anybody to blame for no new chapters, blame me. Rabies won't post chapters until I've made a picture for them. Rabies, might I suggest you just post the chapters, and I'll edit pictures ito them? speaking of which, where the hell is he?And, no, the pics are very important to me, so I won't post chapters without 'em. The pics for the next chapter are almost done, though. Some minor edits, and they're ready to go.
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Post by destructin on Jun 21, 2008 20:54:19 GMT -5
This is awesome, oh If only i could be there.
DAMN ME AND MY NEW-NESS!!
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Post by rabiesisme on Jun 21, 2008 21:06:39 GMT -5
This is awesome, oh If only i could be there. DAMN ME AND MY NEW-NESS!! I'll (see if I can) put you in, cuz I like you.
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Post by destructin on Jun 22, 2008 0:59:24 GMT -5
This is awesome, oh If only i could be there. DAMN ME AND MY NEW-NESS!! I'll (see if I can) put you in, cuz I like you. Hoo-ray!
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Post by rabiesisme on Jun 22, 2008 4:25:18 GMT -5
-The Purge- Chapter Four: Glass Cage. Note: Everything written in blue text depicts events taking place at an unspecified time in the future. Everything written in normal black text depicts events taking place in present time. Also, the events written in blue are linear. That means that blue text in chapter 1 comes chronologically before blue text in chapter 2. When I say 'unspecified time', I mean it's not clear how far in the future we are, not that one blue text is 5 minutes in the future, and another blue text is 5 years in the future. It sounds complicated, but it isn't. Recap: Future. Present time.A few armed guards escorted a barely conscious QuickFeet through a long hall. The pathway they were walking on was lined with tall, marble collums, and the only light in the room came from the candles that were mounted on each of the collums. The windows would remind one of a church, with their huge, colourful glasses with artwork featuring religious figures. The four guards and QuickFeet reached a tall, metal gateway at the end of the path. One of the guards pushed open the gates as two others kept QuickFeet from falling down, seeing as he could barely stay conscious, while a last guard aimed at QuickFeet from behind. They continued past the metal gates, into a room that appeared to be an old laboratory. It had several tables with empty vials on them, some knocked over, some shattered and some just standing there, unscathed. If you passed through the gates and took a left, you would see a cell. It had no windows, and was half wall, because it was in a corner. It had a bench that was made up of a wooden plank which was held up by two chains attached to a wall. A dark figure was sitting against the back wall of the cell in the foetal position, wearing a hood and facing down. Besides the cell, there was nothing of interest in the left part of room. The right side of the room was uninteresting as well, with only the occasional table with lab equipment on it. If you passed the metal gates and continued walking forward, you would reach a big, circular metal platform. The guards took QuickFeet to the platform and threw him on it, making him lose his consciousness. As soon as he hit the platform, a mechanism was activated. A cylinder shaped glass chamber with an open bottom descended on top of the platform, sealing it off and trapping QuickFeet inside. The lid of the glass cylinder was a thick metal plate, with a tube bringing air into the chamber to keep QuickFeet alive. “Not so tough now, eh?” said one of the men as they turned around and walked away laughing. “ Hey, you guys wanna watch LOST at my place?” was the last sound in the room before the door smashed shut with a loud bang. The gang gathered on the roof of their building. They were laying on the ground, stomach down, their eyes just peeking over the brick safety wall that surrounded the roof. In the distance, they could see Illidon walking around. Illidon easily towered over any building in the city, so he had a clear view of the area. Their building was almost the exact centre of the city, so there was a long way to go to reach the edge of the city. Leaving without attracting Illidon’s attention was a difficult task, so they decided to create a distraction to give QuickFeet a chance to escape.
“Alright, me, Grimscott, MVG, Swordkill and McJesus will go down there and try to lead Illidon to the East Side of Brawl City, while you head out West.” said Balto.
“Alright, good luck to you guys. I’ll see you when I get back.“
Everyone besides QuickFeet sneaked towards the fire escape, but QuickFeet held McJesus back.
“Hold on, I need to talk to you.”
All the others climbed down the fire escape, and appeared out of sight.
“What’s up?” Asked a confused McJesus.
QuickFeet’s expression seemed serious.
“Let’s cut the crap. I know you killed Spawner.”
McJesus was silent for a few seconds.
“…I don’t know what you’re tal-”
“Don’t bother. I know it was you. And as soon as this whole thing’s over… I will kill you.”
Nobody spoke for a moment as McJesus looked at the ground. After a few seconds, he turned around, not saying a word, and climbed down the fire escape.
QuickFeet stared at Illidon in the distance as his heart started beating faster and faster with each passing moment. As soon as he noticed that Illidon saw the other Brawlers, he dashed off the roof. Before he fell to the ground, he teleported in mid-air and reappeared on the ground, so he landed safely. In an orange blur, he sprinted towards the West edge of the city at lightning speed, but it was a long way to go.
After passing several city blocks, he suddenly heard a loud noise, as if an alarm went off. While still running, he looked around himself, but saw nothing out of the ordinary. He could hear that the alarm sound was moving around him, but he didn’t see it.
“What the hell is going on?” he though to himself as he kicked it up a notch. He reached the trainyard, which was a long stretch of railway that led towards the West edge. It had about seven tracks lying parallel from each other. There were several trains that went West or East (along with QuickFeet, or against QuickFeet respectively) but they were receiving no power seeing as the humans turned the entire mechanised system off.
As he was about to pass it, QuickFeet was blown into a locomotive by a huge blast of air. Him and the locomotive flew off the track and landed next to the last railway, crashing into the ground. QuickFeet got on his feet and looked over at his assailant; a purple clone of himself.
The clone was identical to him, except for the colour change, and the face. The clone had no facial features whatsoever, only a mouth, which appeared as if the two lips were stitched together. He could still open his mouth, seeing as the ‘stitches’ acted elastically.
QuickFeet kept staring at his copy. Out of nowhere, an electric surge went through the railway tracks, and activated the automated transport system.
All seven tracks now had multiple trains going East and West at breathtaking speeds.
Did this mean that there were humans in the city?
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Post by SwordKill on Jun 22, 2008 4:36:03 GMT -5
Wo-ho-hoah.
Honestly, this is just amazing. And people used to say I was good at writing fan-fics.
How long until both times will meet?
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Post by McJesus on Jun 22, 2008 4:37:08 GMT -5
I'll go start drawing more pics.
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Post by rabiesisme on Jun 22, 2008 4:44:12 GMT -5
Wo-ho-hoah. Honestly, this is just amazing. And people used to say I was good at writing fan-fics. How long until both times will meet? Thanks! Anyway, I'd say about... 4-5 chapters from now.
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Post by spawner on Jun 22, 2008 6:46:56 GMT -5
I can't belive i died in the first chapter D:
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Post by SwordKill on Jun 22, 2008 7:44:21 GMT -5
Also, do you think I could.... possibly have a bit more dialogue? I'm in this party, and I've only said one line...
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Post by rabiesisme on Jun 22, 2008 8:19:14 GMT -5
Also, do you think I could.... possibly have a bit more dialogue? I'm in this party, and I've only said one line... Ouch. You're not gonna like what's comin'. However, I'll try to edit in some dialogue for your character, but it's gonna be hard to not make it seem like a "I'm part of this conversation too :D"-line.
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